Mother told me I wasn't good
for anything
A cold expression and a chip
holding me down
A putrid maggot ridden waste
of puke
A mercenary of epic proportions
you could say
If worthiness were an accolode
I'd surely fall wayside
I know what your thinking
but it isn't true
This is simply why I
do what I do
Don't count your
blessings yet
i am surely on your
tail
For I am the Praetorian
who shall gaineth all.
Just in case your wondering, I didn't write this about myself. It is actually written about someone from the past that I knew. It kind of sucks, so I am sorry. I am in a bit of a block right now. I just hope it clears up before my turn in the Experiment
Jun 20, 2007
The Praetorian
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On the contrary it doesn't suck at all. I think it's really good. You have real talent!
corky- thanks. it all just seems off lately. maybe it's the meds ahahaha.. eh
It doesn't suck ... but it is a bit depressing. Are you nervous about your turn with the experiment yet?
I thought it was good but now I have to look up the word praetorian. ok, looked it up. I should've known that, I've seen Gladiator.
Another wrist slasher. If you Pauline and Cathy got together and wrote a poem there would be mass suicides across the blogosphere when people read it.
Personally though, I liked it. You're too harsh on yourself.
paul- yes i am very nervous. i am almost last so i have some time.
i hope :O
macguffin- or it can be used to describe a corrupt, venal or a mercenary person. but yes most likely to describe one from the praetorian guard.
michael- i know, i know.. the next one will be happy happy, i promise. i am not a depressed person, i am just fascinated with the dark side of writing.
It was kinda good....I enjoyed it....well anywhoo....bye for now:)
I'm not a poetry person, but I got it. :)
Loved the puppy picture. ;-)
And it's not fat, it's muscle. Lookit that stride. Sheer poetry in yadda yadda.
Poetry is good for a block. Just never let yourself spend too much time at any one poem.
Your friend's mom was quite a beotch to her, huh?
Very nice.
The block seems to be going around lately, hope I wasn't a carrier.):
tc
well i really thought thats for YOU only..ha ha.bye.
etain- i know. it's kind of icky...bleh
pissy- yeah he's a funny little guy. even if he's fat and his breath stinks
macguffin- it's fat
eric- i really never spend more than 30 minutes on a poem. if i try to hard it really sucks. well she deserved it. this lady is a puke
cat- i hope not too. have you had your shots lately?
maybe fred is hanging around too much. i get distracted easily
pankaj- thank you :)
ha! I was going to say in that last comment that all the best poets (by which I mean Bukowski) say don't spend more than a half hour. Now, editing things later, that may be different if it's good. But creating the idea should deffinitely take a half hour. Some people spend weeks on one poem! Who the hell has that kind of time or sanity to burn? Mines all ashes!
eric- i wouldn't. i don't have the attention span frankly. that is why i write poetry. i am a spaz so i get bored if i write too long on one topic. well crap, there goes my novel
You could have a novel of connected short fiction that is themed around a hectic life, partying, and having a short attention span because of the damage. That would work. Or maybe not. Thanks for the read.
eric. i might just have to do that :)
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